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lots of repetition of phrases
i think when u say "dose" = you mean does
your conclusion seems too repetitive of ur thesis and body paragraphs, have a lil more imagination and creativity in your restatement of your conclusion... some typos like ? for an "
sentence structure is kind of run on at times, try to organize ur ideas in a more fluid, chronological and logical order